The feedback we received brought light to some issues which we were originally concerned about and other issues which we hadn't yet discussed.
From the feedback we became aware of possible improvements and means to develop our film into a finalised film.
The following YouTube clip is the rough edit version of our Experimental Film - 'Dream'.
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Feedback - Productive Ways To Improve The Film
Visual Image Transitions
We incorporated several unnatural transitions into the edit; primarily to receive feedback as to which transitions work and do not. It was quickly brought to our attention that a certain transition at the beginning of the film should be axed because of it's amateurish nature. The transition symbolises a lock which is multiplied on the screen which spins open to reveal the next shot. The image is displayed below.
This transition was purely experimental and we were fully prepared that we should remove it from the finished film for a more smooth and natural transition.
Post-Production Effects
Another main criticism was the warp hole effect (2:30) towards the very end of the moving images sequence. The effect is to represent the person dreaming awaking from his dream. Feedback informed us that this effect looks too digitised and our Tutor Dominic Green mentioned ways to improve the effect allowing it to flow more naturally with the rest of the film. Dom said "add a blur effect to make the effect look less digitised". We will experiment with the effect and try to accomplish this, however there are a few other ideas which we could incorporate instead to represent the person dreaming awaking. The image below is the warp hole effect.
Still Image Sequence
A final criticism which we received was concerns about the pace throughout the film. This is an issue that we were already aware needs addressing. Because the experimental film which we presented was our rough edit, the pace of the film wasn't fluent.
The main reason that hinted the pace of the film was the still image aspect of our the film. The still image part falls into two sections, the first 20 seconds and the last 20 seconds. These sections represent the persons boredom and loneliness in real time as he is travelling on a coach journey. Due to exporting and time complications we were unable to thoroughly edit these sections as we intend them to be shown in the final edit. We left the last 20 seconds black because we hadn't included the images. The still image sequence at the beginning (0:00 - 0:15) were not edited in any way other than put together with a channel map transition effect between each image.
We received feedback describing the current still image edit as a "slideshow" which is not what we want to portray. Concerning the still image sequences, several good ideas were brought to our attention to improve the fluency and pace.
Firstly, the pace of which the still images are shown is important to represent the person slowly falling asleep on the coach.
Our Tutor Dominic Green said, "use fast cuts at the beginning of the first still image sequence, then reduce the speed of the cuts and display the image on the screen longer as the person is slowly submerging into the dream".
We agree that this is a brilliant idea which will help not only make the audience think why the speed decrease between cuts is changing but it will ease the transition of the submersion into the dream. We will incorporate this idea in the end still image sequence but vice-vercer starting of with slow lengthy cuts which then speeds up and becomes more faster paced cuts as the person awakens and become more alert. The beginning still images will represent daytime and the second sequence of still images will represent afternoon/evening as the sunset appears.
We have based the still image sequences on Chris Marker's film 'La Jetee' (1962). La Jetee is an experimental short film which shows a man's specific memory of a women, whilst he is being experimented on by scientists. We will closely analyse the transitions between the still images which are used in La Jetee and incorporate some of these transitions in both of the still image sequences in our film.
Commendable Post-Production Effects
Throughout the film we have heavily distorted the moving images to represent an unclarity and to make the audience feel a sense of the unknown. We found that this is the effect people have from trying to remember their dream's. We made the colour's throughout the film mainly black with dark blue highlights. However, two moving images didn't have the same dark colour effect and stands out from the rest of the footage.
The first example this happens is when the input volume metre on a bass amplifier is shown at (1:20). The shot flips from the blue effect to the same shot without the effect. The shot without the effect is a luminous orange colour. The blue and orange colour support each other and contrast each other really well. This visually stimulates the audience. The two images below show the shot with and without the dark blow colour distortion effect.
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| This is the shot without the effect. |
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| This is the edited shot with the distorted blue tint colour effect. |
Secondly, we used a close up shot of a person's face. We captured the shot from a POV perspective, which gives the idea that in the person's dream he is acknowledging a person how he see's someone in real life. However, what makes this shot unique unlike any other shot in the film is that we added a negative colour effect to the shot which makes it also stand out from the rest of the shots. The image below is a screenshot of the POV closeup of the person with the negative colour effect.
From the feedback we received this shot and the input volume meter shot caused the most attraction from the audience. The only negative point which we received is that these shots were in a tight gap near each other in one section of the film. Our Tutor Dominic Green said, "Introduce shots with the similar effects throughout the whole moving image aspect of the film because they were different and stands out from the rest of the dark blue and black imagery".
To address the pace of the film, I believe that by incorporating more abstract imagery like the negative shot and the contrasting orange and blue input volume meters, will break the footage up and become more interesting.
Feedback Overall Thoughts
The feedback we received today has undoubtably been beneficial for the next steps to finalise our experimental film. We will address each point, improve aspects which we acknowledge need to be corrected and from my tutor's and peer's suggestions and ideas, I will creatively develop my experimental film to further reach the films aims and generally improve the film.
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